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تاريخ التسجيل: Mar 2019
الدولة: مصر
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Now You're Talking

Small talk is easy
whether you’re discussing the weather or the TV.
But what if there are other words that float in your
head which always remain unsaid?

Words you always wanted to say
but could never find the optimum way
Conversations you end up sweeping under the carpet.
You’d like to begin one but you’re unsure how to start it.

If only you could utilise the correct tools,
learn a new way, find a set of rules
to enable you to have difficult conversations
without offence or obfuscation.

Thanks for sharing this poem with me;
I have been giving it some thought.
There’s much to like. The spelling’s good.
The font is clear. It’s mercifully short.

But I have some ideas to share
which I think will help improve it.
Those idioms don’t travel well.
And the jargon jars: remove it.

Think about the pace and rhythm
and how to make the poem scan.
The ending could be stronger still.
Thanks. I do hope you understand.

It’s easy to talk about this and that;
the TV, the weather, the dog, the cat.
But what of the words that are left unsaid?
The things of which you should have talked instead?

The situations forever broken,
haunted by the ghosts of words unspoken,
and the absence of a proper exchange.
Little wonder that nothing much changes.

But imagine if you could fight that fear,
find the right words so that you can steer
tricky conversations without baulking;
if you could do that, well, now you’re talking.

Brian Bilston
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